Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the chart provides data on among people who are victim of crime and perceived danger.

overall, the perportion of actuall and perceived was noticable in car crime during the period of time whereas actuanl stood at minimum.

lookinh at first figure for perceived on the peck point accounted by 20% and 17% in car crime from 2009 to 2011, whereas the persentage of violent crrime was 15% in perceived catagory in 2009 to 2010 where in 2010 to 2011 it was aproximatley 13% and followed by burgary .

Turning to actual ,a difrent pattern can be observed ,it was minimum surprisingliy near about 4% in 2009 to 2011 whereas in car crime . Moreover accounted for violent crime was similar around 4 % over the period whereas perportion of burgary was 3 % in 2009 to 2010 before a recoving in 2010 to 2011 accupied for 4 %

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While the report attempts to summarise the main features of the graph, the information is presented in a fragmented and often confusing manner. The comparison between perceived danger and actual likelihood is attempted, but the lack of clarity in data reporting makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trends accurately. Key features are mentioned, but the analysis is underdeveloped and lacks a clear, logical structure. To improve, you must ensure you meet the word count and focus on clearly contrasting the two sets of data for each crime type.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and often lack cohesive devices to link ideas effectively. Phrases like 'Turning to actual' are used, but the overall flow is hindered by poor sentence structure and confusing transitions. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to determine which data point corresponds to which crime type. To improve, focus on using transition words more effectively and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that builds upon the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is limited and contains frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'perportion' (proportion), 'actuall' (actual), 'peck' (peak), 'catagory' (category), 'burgary' (burglary), and 'recoving' (recovering). These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data. The response relies on basic terminology and struggles to use precise language to describe trends or statistical changes. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and practice using more precise vocabulary to describe data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant discrepancy'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction, such as 'accounted by 20%' and 'accounted for violent crime was similar'. The range of structures is limited, and the errors are persistent throughout the text. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further disrupts the flow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and word order before submitting your work.

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