Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph shows the percentage of percieved danger and actual likelihood of being a victom of crime in three different crimes.

-> Overall, the proportion of car crime recorded the highest with percieved danger whereas Burglary accounted for lowest with actual danger. In general, voilent crime and burglary showed similarity in both type of danger.

-> The actual danger in Burglary and voilent crime recorded similar percentage around 3% with each 2009/10 and 2010/11 while it was percieved danger in burglary crime was higher with more than 15% in 2009/10 as well as in the voilent crime. The minor difference shown in voilent crime percieved in 2010/11 as similar to the burglary both recorded more than 15%.

-> The car crime actual danger were nearly recorded to the 5% as more than any other catagory given The percieved danger peaked at more than 20% in 2009/10 while it was less than 5% in 2010/11.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the graph, such as the trends in perceived and actual danger for the three crime types. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision in reporting the data. For instance, the description of the car crime data is confusing, particularly the claim that perceived danger dropped from over 20% to less than 5% in 2010/11, which is not clearly supported by the visual evidence provided. While the main features are covered, the lack of clear, accurate comparisons and the somewhat disjointed presentation of the data points prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into an introduction and three body paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes confusing. The use of arrows (->) as bullet points is inappropriate for an IELTS report. Furthermore, the logical progression between sentences is often weak; for example, the transition between the general overview and the specific data points is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the years and the crime categories effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'percieved' (perceived), 'victom' (victim), and 'voilent' (violent). The student relies on basic terminology like 'accounted for', 'recorded', and 'similarity'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, there is little attempt to use more sophisticated or precise language to describe trends or statistical data. To improve, the student should focus on accurate spelling and expanding their range of reporting verbs and comparative adjectives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'car crime actual danger were'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'as similar to the burglary both recorded'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of symbols and run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction limits the score in this criterion.

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