Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph compares the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime for the years 2009 and 2010. The crimes are burglary, car crime, violent crime.
Overall, the perceived danger of being a victim of crimes was significantly more in every crime type for both years. While the percentages for an actual victim to perceiving of being a victim ratio had a substantial difference as being an actual victim had much less percentage compared to perceiving to be one.
21% of people perceived being a victim of a car crimes in 2009 compared to the 16% in 2010. Similarly in 2009 more people perceived of being a victim of burglary and violent crimes than in 2010 by approximately 2.5%.
The percentage of being involved in an actual crime was almost equal for both years being slightly less than 5% for car crimes, 2.5% for violent crimes and burglary.
In conclusion, the percentage for perceived danger of being a victim of crime was higher in 2009, whereas the percentage for actually being a victim was less than perceiving of being one, however, the percentage of actually being in a crime stayed even throughout different crimes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the key trend that perceived danger consistently outweighs actual likelihood. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the percentages for 2009 and 2010, the data reporting is occasionally imprecise (e.g., stating 'approximately 2.5%' for the difference in burglary and violent crime without clearly contrasting the specific figures). To reach a higher band, ensure you provide more precise data points from the graph to support your comparisons. The overview is present but could be more clearly integrated to highlight the most significant differences between the categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The progression of ideas is generally easy to follow. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. For example, the phrase 'percentage of' is used frequently, and some transitions between sentences feel slightly disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the latter', 'this trend') is used more effectively would enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'perceived danger', 'actual likelihood', and 'substantial difference'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'actual victim to perceiving of being a victim ratio' and 'stayed even throughout different crimes'. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the precision of your report. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing by using synonyms or more concise descriptive language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'perceived being a victim of a car crimes' (incorrect article/pluralization) and 'compared to the 16% in 2010' (missing subject). Additionally, some phrasing is slightly ungrammatical, such as 'the percentage for actually being a victim was less than perceiving of being one'. These errors occur frequently enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Increasing your control over prepositions and article usage will help improve your score.
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