Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart illustrates the pecentage of three different crimes which are being predicted and the actual happening during the period between 2009 to 2011.
Overall, it is quite obvious that car crimes has the highest ratio of commitance and preception as well contarary to that burglary percieved same as thevoilent crime but actual happen low in proportion as compared to the voilent crimes.
In 2009/10 burglary was expeted to be just above 15% but crime commited at the ratio of just 3% while car crime were expected to be 21% as compared to the actual crime rate of 4%. Voilent cries were suppose to happen at 15% but actually happened at 3%.
In 2010/11 the perception of crimes cosidered to be less but actual happening remained almost the same as in the previous year. burglary was percieved at 13% as compared to the orignal figure of 3% while car crimes were expected to be at 17% but actuak figure showed just 4% in addition to that voilent crimes were supposed to happen almost 14% but happened actually 3%.
The chart clearly showes that theperception of crimes is quite higher than the orignal figures.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the graph and made relevant comparisons between the perceived and actual crime rates. You covered all three crime types and both time periods. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While you mention that perception is higher than reality, you could improve by highlighting the most significant trends or the most striking gaps between the two sets of data. The data points are generally accurate, but the overall summary could be more concise and professional in tone to better meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall', 'In 2009/10', and 'In 2010/11', to structure the report. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is unclear or repetitive. For example, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited, and the paragraphing could be more effectively utilized to group the data comparisons more logically rather than just listing them by year.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors and word-choice inaccuracies that detract from the quality of the writing. Examples include 'pecentage', 'commitance', 'preception', 'thevoilent', 'voilent', 'cosidered', and 'actuak'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'discrepancy', 'overestimated', or 'proportionate'. While you attempt to use a range of words, the persistent spelling issues and incorrect collocations limit your score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'car crimes has', 'burglary were'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'crimes which are being predicted', 'crimes cosidered to be less'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently and require the reader to re-read certain parts to understand the intended meaning. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.
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