Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of being a victim of crime between 2009 and 2011.

In an overview, the proportion of perceived car crime was higher and actual crime was almost similar ratio of burglary, car crime and vicient crime in the given time period.

First and the foremost is that, actual crime of burglary, car crime and viclent crime was almost similar from 2009 to 2011 which was less than 5% from 2009 to 2011. Moreover, the percentage of perceived burglary, car crime and viclent crime was near about 16% , 22% and 15% respectively in2009 and 2010.

In addition to it, the percentage of perceived burglary crime was nearly 13% and it increased to maximum17% in car crime after that it stand on less than 15% in the viclent crime from 2009 to 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify the main features, the analysis is underdeveloped and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the data. For instance, your description of the figures is vague and contains inaccuracies, such as stating the actual crime rates were 'almost similar' without providing precise data points. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the task, provide specific data to support your claims, and meet the length requirement to allow for a full development of the information presented in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as 'First and the foremost is that' and 'In addition to it', which do not effectively link the complex data points. Paragraphing is present, but the logical flow between sentences is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between perceived and actual crime rates. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would enhance coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'percentage', 'crime', and 'similar'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'vicient' and 'viclent' instead of 'violent'. The phrasing 'near about' and 'stand on' is imprecise and not suitable for an academic report. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'significantly higher', and ensure accurate spelling of key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the percentage of being a victim' (should be 'the percentage of people who were victims') and 'it stand on less than 15%' (should be 'it stood at less than 15%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around percentages and commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage for reporting data, and refining sentence structure to reduce errors.

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