Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of a crime by crime type.
Overall, the graph consists of three bars which shows different percentages of different categories such as burglary,car crime and violent crime.There is a dramatic rise in perceived percentage of car crime as compared to burglary and violent crime.It shows the perceived and actual percentages of the crimes.
The perceived percentage of burglary in 2009/10 is 16% and in 2010/11 is 13%.The actual percentage of burglary in 2009/10 is 3% and in 2010/11 is 3.5%.
The perceived percentage of car crime in 2009/10 is 21% and in 2010/11 is 17%.The actual percentage of car crime in 2009/10 is 4% and in 2010/11 is 3.8%.
The perceived percentage of violent crime in 2009/10 is 15% and in 2010/11 is 13%.The actual percentage of the violent crime in 2009/10 is 3% and in 2010/11 is 3.3%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the three crime categories and the two time periods. However, the report is essentially a list of data points rather than a summary. While you have identified the figures, you have not effectively 'reported the main features' or 'made comparisons' as requested. For instance, you could have highlighted that perceived danger is consistently much higher than actual likelihood across all categories, or that car crime consistently shows the highest perceived danger. To improve, focus on grouping data and identifying trends rather than listing every individual percentage, which makes the report feel mechanical and lacks analytical depth.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is repetitive. Each paragraph follows the exact same sentence structure, which makes the writing feel formulaic. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link the ideas; for example, you could use transition words like 'In contrast,' 'Similarly,' or 'Furthermore' to connect the paragraphs and compare the data points. The current use of simple, repetitive sentence starters ('The perceived percentage of...') makes the flow feel disjointed rather than cohesive.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on the same phrases ('The perceived percentage of', 'The actual percentage of') throughout the text. To achieve a higher band score, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe data, such as 'figures,' 'proportions,' 'statistics,' or 'rates.' Additionally, you should use more varied verbs to describe the data, such as 'stood at,' 'remained constant,' or 'exceeded.' The current vocabulary is functional but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses simple sentence structures almost exclusively. While the grammar is generally accurate, there is a lack of complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, which are necessary for a higher score. There are also minor punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'crime.There'). To improve, try to combine related ideas into single, more complex sentences. For example, instead of two separate sentences for perceived and actual percentages, you could use: 'While the perceived rate of burglary was 16% in 2009/10, the actual likelihood was significantly lower at 3%.'
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