Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph shows the noticable dangers and the acutal probability of being a victim of such cirmes that include Burglary, Car cime and Violent crime. They show the predicted and acutal percenatges of the crimes between the years [redacted phone] to [redacted phone].
The main noticable feature in the graph is that the predicted precentage of crime is higher than the actual prectange of the crime to acutally happen, the predicated precentage is 5 times higher then the actual liekliood of the crime happening. another noticable feature mainly in Car carimes and Violent crime in both years from 2009-10 and 2010-11 both crimes are at the same likelihood of happening however there has been a small incrase in Burglray from 2010-11.
The highst precieved danger is was in Car crime till 2009-11 on the other hand in both predited Burglary and Voilent crime in 2009-10 at 15 precentage and the same in 2010-11 at 14 percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear, accurate overview. While it identifies the general trend that perceived danger is higher than actual likelihood, the specific data points are often inaccurate or confusingly presented. For example, the claim that perceived danger is '5 times higher' is not clearly supported by the data provided. Furthermore, the description of the trends for specific crimes is vague and contains inaccuracies regarding the figures. To improve, you must ensure that the data cited is precise and that the comparison between categories is logical and easy to follow. The report lacks a clear summary of the key features, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'noticable feature'. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is weak, and the logical progression of information is hindered by unclear sentence structures. While there is an attempt to group information, the lack of clear signposting makes the relationship between the different crime types and the years difficult to track. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains numerous spelling errors, such as 'noticable', 'acutal', 'cirmes', 'prectange', 'predicated', 'liekliood', and 'precieved'. These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is a lack of precision in describing the data. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuation', 'significant', 'marginal', or 'discrepancy'. The current reliance on repetitive and misspelled words limits the effectiveness of your communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence fragments, and incorrect word forms. For example, 'The highst precieved danger is was in Car crime' is grammatically incoherent. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used often contain errors in punctuation and tense. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and word order. Increasing the variety of your sentence structures while maintaining accuracy is essential for achieving a higher score in this criterion.
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