Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This Graph illustrates to the information about the crime ratio and their type of being a actual victim of crime.

This graph shows to the Crime type and perfect victim of the crime.

Here is shows to the percentages of the crime and also give to the four type of graph data the one is Perceived from 2009/10, and second one is Actual 2009/10, the third one is Perceived 2010/11,and the last one is Actual from 2010/11.

Here is the highest crime ratio for overall four data graph so the Car Crime ratio is very high off all others the second highest crime ratio is Violent Crime.

But the third one is Burglary there have a some low crime ratio but the Perceived 2009/10 ratio is higher than the Violent crime even the perceived 2010/11 ratio is similar to Violent crime either the two other crime graph is lower than the others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. While it identifies the topic, it lacks a clear overview of the main trends or significant differences. The description of the data is fragmented and confusing, failing to accurately report the specific figures or make meaningful comparisons between the perceived and actual likelihoods. The response relies on vague descriptions like 'very high' or 'some low' rather than referencing the provided data points. To improve, you must group the data logically, highlight the most striking differences (e.g., the gap between perceived and actual car crime), and provide specific data points to support your observations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks logical progression. The paragraphs are disjointed, and the sentences within them do not flow naturally. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the text feel like a series of isolated, repetitive statements. For example, the transition between discussing crime types and the years is abrupt. To improve, use linking words such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'whereas' to connect your ideas. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one paragraph for the highest crime types and another for the comparison between perceived and actual data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'crime ratio' are used incorrectly throughout the text, as the graph displays percentages of victims, not ratios. There is a lack of academic vocabulary required for a Task 1 report. Many phrases, such as 'perfect victim of the crime' and 'four type of graph data', are unnatural and impede clarity. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'significant', 'notably', and 'discrepancy'. Avoid repeating the same basic words in every sentence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the meaning difficult to follow. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'Here is shows to the percentages'). The use of prepositions is also frequently incorrect. The sentence structures are simple and repetitive, with no evidence of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Practice using articles correctly and review the rules for pluralization and verb tense consistency.

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