Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The above draft depicts the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime from 2009/10 - 2010/11. In between 2009/10 the perceived notion of being a victim to a car crime was the highest at above 20%, although the actual likelihood of being targeted by such a crime was actually just about 5%. The stance on this particular crime didn't make too much of a difference as even in 2010/11, car crime was regarded the most perceived crime to be a target of. The other leading cause of people's fear was burglary, however the difference between the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim to this was vast - in 2009/10 it was considered 15% likely but the actual likelihood was way below 5%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While the student identifies the main features of car crime and burglary, the report is incomplete as it fails to cover all crime types presented in the graph (such as violent crime or robbery). The comparison between perceived and actual likelihood is attempted, but the lack of comprehensive data coverage and the insufficient length prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure all categories are addressed and provide a clear overview of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is written as a single paragraph, which hinders logical progression. While there is a basic attempt to sequence ideas, the lack of paragraphing and limited use of cohesive devices make the text feel disjointed. The transition between the discussion of car crime and burglary is abrupt. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction/overview from the body details, and incorporate a wider range of linking words such as 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'conversely' to connect ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. Phrases like 'the stance on this particular crime' and 'regarded the most perceived crime' are slightly awkward or imprecise. The student relies on basic descriptors such as 'highest' and 'vast.' To achieve a higher score, incorporate more sophisticated collocations and precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'discrepancy,' 'pronounced,' or 'statistically significant,' to better describe the differences between the perceived and actual figures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are noticeable errors in punctuation and phrasing. For example, the sentence 'in 2009/10 it was considered 15% likely but the actual likelihood was way below 5%' lacks necessary punctuation, such as a comma before 'but.' Additionally, the phrasing 'in between 2009/10' is grammatically incorrect for a time period. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focus on using correct prepositions and ensuring complex sentences are punctuated accurately.
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