Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the perceived danger as well as actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by burglary, car crime and violent crime.

In 2009/10, as per perceived danger livelihood, car crime represented the largest group, accounting for around 21%. Noticeably, burglary and vilolent crime stood at the same level, at approximately 15%. Neverthless, as per actual expectation, the car crime made up about 4%, while burglary and violent accounted for 2% as well as 3% respectively.

In 2010/11, the proportion of car crime was declined slightly from around 21% to 17% as per perceived danger likeliness. Following this, burglary and violent crime fell steadily, and both were recorded at about 13%. However, by actual likelihood, the percentages of car crime were comprised 4%. The figures of burglary and violent crime were equal, at about 3%.

Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of car crime was considerably high as per perceived danger and actual expectations in both periods. In contrast, burglary and violent crime stood at almost same level in both likelihoods.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and making comparisons between the perceived and actual crime rates. You have successfully highlighted the key trends for burglary, car crime, and violent crime across the two periods. However, the analysis could be improved by providing more precise comparisons between the two categories (perceived vs. actual) rather than just listing figures. For instance, noting the significant gap between the perceived danger of car crime and its actual likelihood would have strengthened the response. Overall, the information is accurate and relevant to the provided graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for each year, and a summary. The use of cohesive devices such as 'In 2009/10', 'Noticeably', 'Nevertheless', and 'In contrast' helps guide the reader through the data. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the phrase 'as per perceived danger livelihood' is awkward and disrupts the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally would help elevate the score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'accounting for', 'represented', 'declined slightly', and 'fell steadily'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'perceived danger livelihood' and 'actual expectation', which are not standard in this context. Additionally, there is a spelling error ('vilolent'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over academic vocabulary. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'the proportion of car crime was declined' (passive voice error), 'the percentages of car crime were comprised 4%' (incorrect verb usage), and 'burglary and violent accounted for' (missing noun). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the data. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice in data reporting.

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