Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This graph shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. Overall this is evident that the comparison between the crime and victim. In 2009/ 10 the ratio of crime dominated and after 10 years it lower. Moreover in the first graph the perceived rose to 2009 / 10. Main while the actual decreased which is less then 5. Although then it accounted more then 10. At second graph the car crime in which perceived in 2009/ 10 climbed more then 20 .Furthermore at second stage in the car crime the actual ratio dipped which is 4 in 2009/10. However perceived 2010/11 soared more then 15 it almost 17. Any how the last graph of car crime is weak. Which may be 4. Any how the final graph is about violent crime. In which the first is higher then the graph became lower then it climbed at 17 and least at last after one year which is 2010/ 11.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The main features are not identified effectively, and the comparisons are confusing and often inaccurate. For example, the description of the trends is vague, using phrases like 'the last graph of car crime is weak' rather than describing the actual data points. The information is presented in a disjointed manner, making it difficult to follow the trends in perceived versus actual crime. To improve, you must focus on selecting key data points (such as the highest and lowest values) and describing them clearly rather than attempting to list every minor fluctuation in a confusing way.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. The ideas are presented as a series of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive report. There is a lack of effective paragraphing, and the use of cohesive devices is either missing or misused (e.g., 'Main while', 'Any how'). The referencing is unclear, as it is often difficult to determine which part of the graph the writer is referring to. To reach a higher band, you need to group related information into clear paragraphs and use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'graph', 'higher', and 'lower'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'ratio of crime dominated' and 'perceived rose to'. The lack of precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked') significantly hinders the clarity of the report. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as fragments ('Which may be 4.') and run-on sentences. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and misuse of commas. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, you should focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using more complex structures accurately. Proofreading for basic errors like subject-verb agreement and punctuation is essential.

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