Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graph illustrates the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Overall, Perceived was high among three categories (burglary, car crime and violent crime) while actual likelihood stay low.
In burglary, perceived 2009/10 was at 15.5%, and perceived 2010/11 fell slightly to 13.5%. However, actual 2009/10 and actual 2010/11, was quite similar in number, at 2% and 2.5%, respectively. The number of car crime perceived 2009/10 and 2010/11 was 21% and 16.5%, respectively. Furthermore, the car crime in actual 2009/10 and 2010/11, at same number of 4.5%. In addition to this, the percentage of these perceived and actual was at the top as compare to other two categories.
Surprisingly, the number of violent crime ratio was quite similar to the number of burglary, in both term of perceived and actual, which was 15% and 13.5%, respectively. In conclusion, the number of car crime stay at the top while burglary and violent crime stay low in both terms.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the contrast between perceived and actual crime rates. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identified the categories, the comparisons between the two years are occasionally inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as stating that actual rates for 2009/10 and 2010/11 were 'at same number of 4.5%' for car crime, when the graph shows slight variations. Furthermore, the conclusion repeats information already stated rather than providing a synthesis of the data. To improve, ensure you accurately report the specific figures and focus on the most significant trends rather than listing every data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally misused. For example, 'In addition to this' and 'Furthermore' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the comparison between burglary and violent crime is vague. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus will help improve the flow and logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'the number of... was...' and 'perceived/actual'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'in both term of' (should be 'in terms of') and 'at the top as compare to' (should be 'compared to'). To achieve a higher score, try to vary your vocabulary by using synonyms for 'number' (e.g., 'figure', 'proportion', 'rate') and more sophisticated ways to describe trends, such as 'remained stable', 'witnessed a decline', or 'exceeded'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('actual likelihood stay low', 'car crime stay at the top') and missing articles or incorrect prepositions ('in both term of'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often repetitive. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentences are grammatically complete. Incorporating a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, would also be beneficial.
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