Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table depict the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime . The information by selection and reporting the data for feature as comparisons relevant. By crime type
It is clearly seen that, the perceived and actual like being a victim of crime, car crime is was highest percentage of perceived and actual. However, Burglary and violent crime was same percentage.
Moving towards remaining information, perceived it was 15 percentage and actual decrease was 9 percentage. in Burglary. Then perceived 2010/11 was 13 percentage and Actual was 3 percentage.
Moving towards remaining information of perceived 2009/10 was car crime
highest persentage was 20 and actual was 5 persentage.
2010/14 of p/f percived was 17 persentage and actual was decrease sperately persentage. Violent crime was percived 15 persentage and actual 2009/10 was 3 persentage. Ren 13 persentage of percived and 4 persentage was actual.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately address the task requirements. It does not provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. The data is presented in a fragmented, confusing manner, making it difficult to identify trends or comparisons. Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. The information provided is often inaccurate or poorly linked to the visual data, failing to report the main features as required by the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. Paragraphs are disjointed, and there is no clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive and awkward use of 'Moving towards remaining information'. The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult for the reader to follow the data being discussed. The overall arrangement is incoherent, and the lack of proper sentence structure further hinders the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'persentage' and 'percived', and word choice is often inappropriate or imprecise. The student struggles to use basic terminology related to data description, such as 'increase' or 'decrease', often using them incorrectly in context. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the errors are frequent enough to impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many fragments and run-on sentences. Subject-verb agreement is frequently incorrect, for example, 'car crime is was highest' and 'Burglary and violent crime was same'. Punctuation is also inconsistent and often incorrect. The range of structures is extremely limited, and the high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand.
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