Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given graph shows the percentage of crime rate in different time period.The graph shows ratio between actual and perceived crime.lets analyse it in different paragraphs. In 2009 the ratio between both crime was about 25 percent,which is an alarming situation.while in 2010 , perceived crime was about 20 percent.On the other hand the actual crime activity was about 2 percent in dacoit.percieved ratio was 15 and in 2010 car crime ratio was actual was 16 percent while perceived was 21 percent.violent crime ratio was perceived was 15 percent as compared to actual violation which was 14 percent. In comparison the perceived crime ratio is more than actual in 2009 and 2010 .car crime is more as compared to other crimes .It is about 15 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to identify some data points, the summary is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The information provided is often confusing or inaccurate, such as the reference to 'dacoit' which is not present in the graph, and the data points are presented in a disjointed manner without meaningful comparison. The response does not adequately highlight the key features or the relationship between perceived and actual crime across the different categories, leading to an underdeveloped response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, they do not serve to organise the information effectively. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical or misused (e.g., 'lets analyse it in different paragraphs'). Referencing is unclear, and the lack of transition between sentences makes the text feel like a list of disconnected observations rather than a cohesive report. The overall arrangement is not logical, and the reader struggles to connect the data points to the broader context of the graph.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The range of vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'ratio', 'crime', and 'percent' throughout the text. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'actual crime activity was about 2 percent in dacoit' and 'actual violation', which do not accurately reflect the data or standard English usage. The vocabulary is insufficient to describe the trends or comparisons required for an Academic Task 1 response, and the errors in terminology impede the clarity of the information being presented.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'The given graph shows the percentage of crime rate in different time period.The graph shows ratio between actual and perceived crime.lets analyse it in different paragraphs.'). Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect comma usage. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. The lack of control over basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement and article usage, is evident throughout the response.

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