Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The bar diagram compares the percentages of perceived danger and actually being a victim of a burglary, car crime or violent crime in 2009/10 and in 2010/11.

Overall, the perceived danger had by far the highest percentages for all types of crime. The perceived crime rate fell in the following year irrespective of the crime type, while the actual crime rate in burglary increased slightly and remained the same for car crime and violent crime.

In 2009/10, the perceived burglary was just above 15%, while the figure fell to around 13% in the following year. The actual burglary occurred around 2% of times in 2009/10, which rose by a small margin in 2010/11. Almost similar pattern was observed for violent crimes, except the rate of actual violent crimes remained the same in both years.

Car crime had the highest percentages in both perceived and actual event throughout the time. In 2009/10 there were above 20% of perceived car crimes. However, this figure fell substantially in the next year. The actual car crime rate remained constant during this period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task well. You have identified the main features and made relevant comparisons between the two years and the three crime types. The overview is clear and accurately summarizes the main trends, such as the disparity between perceived and actual crime rates. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with maximum precision; for example, when you mention 'above 20%', specifying the exact figure (if possible) or using more precise comparative language would strengthen the analysis. Overall, the information is well-selected and logically presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the data, which aids readability. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2009/10', and 'However' are used effectively to guide the reader. The progression of ideas is smooth, and the paragraphing is appropriate. To improve further, you could vary your linking phrases slightly more to avoid a repetitive structure at the start of sentences, but the current use of cohesion is already quite effective and clear.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'fell substantially', 'remained constant', and 'by a small margin' demonstrate a good command of descriptive language. There are some minor issues with collocation, such as 'perceived crime had by far the highest percentages' (which is slightly awkward) and 'actual burglary occurred around 2% of times' (which is grammatically imprecise). However, the vocabulary is generally appropriate for the task and does not impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. You demonstrate good control over basic grammar, and most sentences are error-free. There are occasional slips, such as 'The actual burglary occurred around 2% of times' (should be 'The actual burglary rate was around 2%') and 'Almost similar pattern was observed' (missing an article: 'An almost similar pattern'). Despite these minor errors, your control of grammar is consistent, and the meaning is always clear. Increasing the variety of complex structures would help elevate this score.

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