Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares people’s perceived likelihood of becoming victims of three types of crime—burglary, car crime and violent crime—with the actual likelihood in 2009/10 and 2010/11.

Overall, people consistently overestimated their chances of becoming victims of crime. Car crime was perceived as the most likely type in both years, while the actual rates were considerably lower for all three categories. In addition, perceived likelihood generally fell from 2009/10 to 2010/11, whereas actual likelihood changed only slightly.

In 2009/10, around 21% of people believed they were likely to experience car crime, compared with an actual figure of 5%. The perceived likelihood of burglary and violent crime was much lower, at approximately 15.5% and 15.8%, respectively, while their actual rates were only 2.5% and 3.8%.

In 2011,people consistently overstimated their chances because victims of crime.Car crime catagory.But in 2009/2010 people beleived they were likely to experience car crime compared with an actual figure of 2.55%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph in the first three paragraphs, identifying the trend that perceived danger exceeds actual likelihood. However, the final paragraph is problematic. It introduces repetitive and inaccurate information, such as the confusing reference to '2.55%' and the incomplete sentence 'because victims of crime'. This indicates a failure to complete the task effectively. While the overview and the first body paragraph are well-structured, the breakdown in the final section means the task is only partially addressed in terms of data accuracy and clarity. To improve, ensure all data points are checked for accuracy and that the conclusion synthesizes the data rather than repeating it poorly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay begins with a clear logical progression, using cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In addition', and 'In 2009/10' to guide the reader. However, the final paragraph lacks coherence. The transition between the third and fourth paragraphs is abrupt, and the internal structure of the final paragraph is disjointed, with fragmented sentences and unclear referencing. While the paragraphing is initially appropriate, the loss of control in the final section disrupts the overall flow of the response. To reach a higher band, ensure that every paragraph maintains the same level of logical structure and that cohesive devices are used to link ideas smoothly throughout the entire text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with terms like 'perceived likelihood', 'consistently overestimated', and 'categories' used correctly. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'catagory' and 'overstimated'. These errors, combined with the awkward phrasing in the final paragraph, indicate a limited control over vocabulary. While the student can convey the main message, the lack of precision in the latter half of the essay prevents a higher score. Focusing on spelling accuracy and using more precise collocations would help elevate the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the comparative structure 'while their actual rates were only 2.5%'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly in the final paragraph, including punctuation issues and sentence fragments like 'Car crime catagory.' and 'because victims of crime.' These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While the first half of the essay demonstrates a reasonable level of control, the grammatical breakdown at the end significantly impacts the overall accuracy. Improving sentence construction and proofreading for basic punctuation and subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.

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