Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Overall, the perceived 2009/10 had highest figure in car crime, while the actual crime had lowest proportion in burglary. The perceived 2009/10, actual 2009/10, perceived 2010/11 and actual 2010/11 fluctuated in the given figure.
With regard the Perceived 2009/10 had highest figure in Burglary, it was about over 15%, while the actual 2009/10 had lowest, it was about 2% crimes. In burglary perceived 2010/11 and actual 2010/11 was about 13% and 3% crimes. In car crime perceived 2009/10 had highest figure just over 20% while actual 2010/11 had lowest, it was about 4% crime. The 4% crimes is occurred in actual 2009/10 and about 17% in perceived 2010/11.
On the other hand perceived crime had also highest proportion, it was about 15% crime, while the actual2009/10 had only 3% crimes. The perceived was 14% crimes and actual2010/11 was only 3% crimes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or logical grouping of the information. The main features are not clearly highlighted, and the comparisons are confusing. For instance, the statement 'the perceived 2009/10 had highest figure in car crime' is vague, and the data points provided are often difficult to follow or inaccurate when compared to the graph. The response lacks a clear structure to present the trends, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the main differences between perceived and actual crime rates. To improve, focus on grouping data by crime type or year and clearly contrasting the perceived versus actual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs do not flow logically. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes incorrect, such as the repetitive use of 'it was about' and 'crimes'. Referencing is often unclear, making it hard to determine which data point is being discussed. The transition between the general overview and the specific details is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'conversely', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'highest figure', 'lowest proportion', and 'crimes' are used repeatedly, which restricts the range of the response. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or precise terminology related to data description. Some word choices are awkward, such as 'The 4% crimes is occurred', which is grammatically incorrect and lexically imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'surpassed', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a decline', or 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The 4% crimes is occurred'), incorrect preposition usage ('With regard the Perceived'), and awkward sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, such as 'the actual 2009/10 had lowest, it was about 2% crimes'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and reducing the frequency of errors in basic grammar.
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