Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The graph illustrates the comparison of perceived harm with the real likelihood of being a victim of crime like burglary, car crime and violent crime. This comparison is done for the year 2009/10 and 2010/11.

Overall, all the perceived crimes are significantly more that that of the actual ones. Along with this, the actual crimes of a particular category remains the same in both the years mentioned throughout all the categories. The most difference between them is seen in the year 2009/10 in the category of car crime, while the least difference is visible for violent crimes in the year 2010/11.

There is a similarity in burglary and violent crime, where in the year 2009/10 the amount perceived was around 15% and in 2010/11 it was 13% for both the categories. For burglary the actual amount was 2.5% and 3% for the year 2009/10 and 2010/11. At around the same scale there lies the cases of violent crime being at 3% for both 2009/10 and 2010/11.

The year 2009/10 has major spike perceived car crime at 21% in comparison to actual being at 4%, similarly the year 2010/11 has 17% and 4% of perceived and actual car crime respectively. 2009/10s, 21% perceived crime is the most amongst all the other various crimes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the graph, such as the consistent gap between perceived and actual crime and the specific trends for car crime. You provided data points to support your observations, which is essential for Task 1. However, the analysis could be improved by grouping the data more effectively; for instance, comparing the categories rather than listing them in separate paragraphs. Additionally, the statement that actual crime rates remained the same is slightly inaccurate, as there are minor fluctuations (e.g., burglary rising from 2.5% to 3%). Ensuring precision when interpreting data is vital for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Along with this', and 'In comparison to' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences in the third paragraph is a bit repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, but the structure could be more sophisticated to better highlight the comparisons between the two years and the three crime types. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'perceived', 'likelihood', and 'category'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'all the perceived crimes are significantly more that that of the actual ones' (should be 'higher than') and 'at around the same scale there lies the cases'. To reach a higher band, try to use more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'discrepancy', 'fluctuation', or 'surpassed'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the most difference' (should be 'the greatest difference') and '2009/10s, 21% perceived crime' (incorrect possessive usage). There are also minor issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for small grammatical slips and refining sentence structure will help improve your accuracy.

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