Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The drawing illustrates the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being victim of crime in the year from 2009 to 2010 by crime type.
Upon the initial observation of the graph is that Burglary rate are so high but it decline in 2010 afterwards car crime actual likelihood of being a victim of car crime in 2009 which have high index points till 20 percent later a small proportion decline till 2010, Violent crime also have massively high proportion but in 2010 small decrease in perceived.
Upon the closer examination, I conclude that the report according to the given selecting information is that thrice crime have high proportion in 2009 later a substantial progress take place and crime ratio slows down also has chances that in future the ratio of crime become zero.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the student attempts to describe the data, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The analysis is superficial, and the student makes inaccurate claims, such as suggesting that crime ratios might become zero in the future, which is not supported by the data. Key features, such as the comparison between perceived danger and actual likelihood, are not clearly articulated or contrasted. To improve, ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed, provide a clear summary of the main trends, and avoid personal speculation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is ineffective, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt or confusing. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the phrase 'Upon the initial observation of the graph is that', which is grammatically disjointed and fails to link the introduction to the body. The progression of ideas is not clear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the crime types. Using a more standard structure—Introduction, Overview, and two detailed body paragraphs—would greatly improve the flow and logical progression of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'high' and 'small proportion' throughout the text. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'thrice crime' and 'substantial progress take place', which do not accurately describe the data trends. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to graphs and statistics. To achieve a higher band, the student should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'significant', and 'marginal', and ensure they are used in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Burglary rate are so high'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as 'Violent crime also have massively high proportion but in 2010 small decrease in perceived.' The lack of proper punctuation and the misuse of articles further detract from the quality of the writing. The student relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, with very few attempts at complex sentences, and those that are attempted are often grammatically incorrect.
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