Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the given graph illustrate the danger and likelihood of a suspect in crime actual and past year between 2009 to 2011.

overall, i can clearly seen that crime throght by car take highest place in this chart.whereas viloeont crime and burglary almost shos same ratio in this chart .

to begin with.car crime are PEAK IN 2009 to 2010 percevied at 23PERCENT And reality WAS THEY FALL DOWN DRAMACTICLY ON 4 PERCENT IN 2010 TO 2010. PERCEVICED CRIME NEXT YEAR acconted for 17 or actual was simllar.

to foolwing this chart , cahrt demonstarets the all crime type in simmilar quantity burglary and violent crime are simmilar in actually and previos year reprsenterd re

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you attempt to identify the main features of the graph, the analysis is incomplete and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the task. The description of the data is fragmented and often unclear, particularly regarding the comparison between perceived and actual crime rates. Key trends are not clearly highlighted, and the response ends abruptly without a complete summary of the data provided. To improve, ensure you cover all categories presented in the graph and provide a more structured comparison between the two variables.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or are absent, making the transition between sentences feel mechanical and confusing. For example, the phrase 'to foolwing this chart' is non-standard and does not effectively link the ideas. The lack of clear paragraphing and the incomplete nature of the sentences hinder the overall flow of the report. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences and appropriate linking words to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'throght', 'viloeont', 'shos', 'percevied', 'dramacticly', and 'acconted', which impede readability. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data accurately, relying on basic terms that do not demonstrate an ability to discuss trends or comparisons effectively. To improve, you should practice using specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'accounted for', and 'discrepancy', while paying closer attention to accurate spelling and word choice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the meaning unclear. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'graph illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with random capitalization and missing spaces. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using a mix of simple and complex structures while proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy.

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