Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The data presents about the danger of crime and also about the victims of crime.

Overall, the graph shows three types of crime and also your times of crime. The large list is car crime and the smallest is violent crime.

The graph first gives information about the burglary crime and it is 15% perceived 2009/10 and the 12% is in 2018/11 and the actual is on same position and these are at 3% in 2009/11.

The second is car crime and it is 21% in perceived 2009/10 and 17% is perceived 2010/11. And the both actuals are at similar stage and these are 4.5% in 2009/11.

The third is violent crime and this describe the 15% perceived 2009/10 and also other perceived 2009/11 is on the 13%. The first actual of violent crime is 3% and it is held in 2009 to 2011 and last is second actual and it is only 3.5% and that is occur in 2010 to 2011.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The data interpretation is inconsistent and confusing, particularly regarding the years and percentages. For example, the statement 'the actual is on same position' is vague and does not accurately reflect the graph. The report lacks a clear summary of the trends, and the comparison between perceived and actual likelihood is poorly developed. The information provided is often inaccurate or difficult to follow, which prevents a clear understanding of the data presented in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as 'The first actual of violent crime is 3% and it is held in 2009 to 2011'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data point is being discussed. The transition between sentences is abrupt, and the overall structure lacks the necessary flow to guide the reader through the data effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic phrasing such as 'The data presents' and 'The graph first gives information'. There is a lack of precision in describing statistical data, with frequent misuse of terms like 'stage' instead of 'level' or 'percentage'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and there are several instances where word choice is inappropriate for an academic report, such as 'The large list is car crime'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'this describe the 15%' and 'that is occur in 2010'. Sentence structures are predominantly simple and often contain errors in tense and word order. Punctuation is basic, and the misuse of articles and prepositions is common throughout the text. The lack of complex structures and the high frequency of errors make the writing difficult to read and understand.

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