Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph above illustrates the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime, with the graph addressing three types of crime which are burglary, car crime and violent crime in the years 2009/2010 and 2010/2011.
As we can see, car crime holds the highest percentages with over 20 percent on the probability of getting your car stolen in the yea 2009/2010, but on the following year the perceived car crime significantly drops to 17 percent, holding the same share on the actual crime to happen. While in fact only less than 5 percent that it actually happened. Violent crime and burglary holds almost the same amount of percentages, in both years with 15 percent on the perceived danger and less than 5 percent on the probability of the actual crime to happen.
In conclusion we don’t see that much of a change on both years there is only some slight changes in the perceived danger.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response identifies the main features of the graph, such as the disparity between perceived and actual crime rates. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision in reporting the data. For instance, the description of the percentages is vague, and the comparison between the two years is not fully developed. The summary of the data for violent crime and burglary is grouped together, which obscures the specific differences between these categories. To reach a higher band, you should provide more accurate data points and ensure that all categories are clearly distinguished and compared throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices, they are often used mechanically or inaccurately, such as the transition 'While in fact only less than 5 percent that it actually happened.' The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the perceived and actual figures. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the flow of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There is a reliance on basic phrasing, such as 'holds the highest percentages' and 'don’t see that much of a change.' Some word choices are slightly unnatural or imprecise, such as 'actual crime to happen' instead of 'actual incidence of crime.' To improve, you should aim to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'discrepancy,' 'fluctuation,' or 'statistically significant.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'in the yea 2009/2010' (spelling error), 'holding the same share on the actual crime to happen' (awkward phrasing), and 'there is only some slight changes' (subject-verb agreement error). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and proofreading for minor slips would be beneficial.
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