Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

I am writing here about how our society being part of crime in many different way. In the above paragraph they showed us some ranges with percentages. First one I would like to arise here is Burglary it is almost 10-15 percentage exist that how illegal function individuals are performing Actually in 2009 to 2010 this was the range they are doing likewise. The second one i would like to mention here is about car crime that is perceived in 2009 to 2010 most happened. ITS RAtio IS almost more then 2 other crime mention here and almost 20 percent thsi case was happened . The Third one is violent crime that perceived in 2010 to 2011 and its percentage is 10 to 15 percent. This was the overall graphic design I discussed here with detailed percentage and in which year range they were existing most. We should stop this crime in group form so then our country will be free of any crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately report the data presented in the graph. You have not clearly distinguished between 'perceived danger' and 'actual likelihood', which is the core of the task. Furthermore, the data points mentioned (e.g., '10-15 percentage') are vague and do not accurately reflect the specific values shown in the chart. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the crime types. To improve, you must focus on extracting specific data points and identifying the main trends or differences between the two categories (perceived vs. actual) rather than providing a narrative description.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response lacks logical organization. It is written as a single block of text rather than using clear paragraphing to separate the introduction, overview, and body details. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the awkward transitions 'First one I would like to arise here' and 'The second one i would like to mention'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the crime types. Using clear linking words like 'in contrast', 'whereas', or 'similarly' would help improve the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. Phrases like 'illegal function individuals are performing' and 'overall graphic design' are not suitable for describing statistical data. There are also significant issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'arise' instead of 'mention' and the inconsistent use of capitalization (e.g., 'ITS RAtio IS'). You need to expand your range of vocabulary to include terms related to data analysis, such as 'proportion', 'significant', 'exceeds', and 'statistically'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this case was happened'), incorrect tense usage, and fragmented sentence structures. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making the meaning unclear. For example, 'I am writing here about how our society being part of crime' is grammatically incorrect and does not serve as an appropriate introduction to a data report. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring consistent verb tenses before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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