Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar graph portrays of the probably danger and the real chances that an individual become a victim of crime like burglary , car crime and violent crime. Evidently, victims of perceived danger were higher than actual crimes.

in 2009/10, car crime had greatly affected by perception with 21% which was actaully around 4% only. As compared to this, aspected crime for burglary and violent crime were high, standing at approximately 15.5% and 16% respectively. In contrast, the actual rates for these two were dramatically lower, with burglary only around 2% of the population and violent crime just 3%.

By 2010/11, The car crime had the largest decline, falling to about 17.5%, while concern for burglary and violent crime decreased to roughly 13% and 14%. Despite these , the real-world crime data showed no change, with actual victim rates remaining steady at around 2.5% for burglary, 4.5% for car crime, and 3% for violent crime.

ocerall, it had actually lower rates in actual than the predicted data.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, including the comparison between perceived and actual crime rates. You successfully identified the trends for the three crime types over the two periods. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention car crime was 'around 4%' in 2009/10, but the graph shows it closer to 20%. Additionally, the overview is quite brief and lacks a clear synthesis of the overall trend. To improve, ensure that data points are transcribed more accurately from the visual and provide a more comprehensive summary of the main differences between perception and reality.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for each year, and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'As compared to this', and 'Despite these' are used to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by minor mechanical errors, such as the lowercase 'in' at the start of the second paragraph and the capitalization error in 'The' within the third paragraph. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the transition between the body paragraphs and the conclusion could be smoother to enhance the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'perceived danger', 'actual likelihood', and 'dramatically lower'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'portrays of the probably danger' (should be 'portrays the perceived danger') and 'aspected crime' (likely meant 'expected crime' or 'perceived crime'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more accurate collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('car crime had greatly affected by perception') and incorrect preposition usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and capitalization at the start of sentences. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the mid-range. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and sentence-level mechanics will significantly improve your accuracy.

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