Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given task is in the form of bar graph showcasing information regarding the perceived threat and actual likelihood of being crime victim. the data is calibrated in Percentage the year under observation are from 2009 to 2011. It is a clear and coherent representation.

overall, the perceived likelihood of being a victim of crime topped the chart in all crime type whereas, the Actual likelihood of being a victim of crime was ranked the lowest during given time span.

To commence with, it is observed in case of Burglary crime time, the top seat was notched by perceived crime with just over 15% followed by the Actual crime which was almost 3% in 2009 to 2010. meanwhile, in 2011 the former figure reduce to 13% and latter one increase to just around 4%. In the car crime, the perceived of crime was just over 20% in the time period of 2009 to 2010. and the Actual crime was just under 5% which hover arond 4% in next year. while the perceived crime desered to approximately 16%.

Getting into further, the date of violent crime in the year 2009 to 10, the perceived crime was around 15% and Actual crime was nearly 3.5%, with the passage of time the Perceived crime decrease to nearly 13% whereas the data for actual crime remain same in next year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, including comparisons between perceived and actual crime rates. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, the description of the 2011 figures for burglary is confusingly phrased, and the summary of the car crime data lacks precision. While the overview identifies the general trend that perceived danger is higher than actual likelihood, the supporting details are sometimes muddled, which prevents a fully clear and accurate summary of the provided information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or awkward, such as 'Getting into further' and 'To commence with'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when distinguishing between the two categories of crime data. The flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression of ideas feel somewhat disjointed at times.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'notched by', 'desered', and 'hover arond'. The student relies on repetitive phrasing like 'perceived crime' and 'actual crime' rather than using more varied terminology or synonyms to refer to the data points. Spelling errors, such as 'arond' and 'desered', are present, though they do not significantly impede the overall meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Issues include missing articles ('in case of Burglary crime time'), incorrect verb forms ('figure reduce to', 'latter one increase'), and inconsistent tense usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors is noticeable and detracts from the overall quality of the writing. More attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage is required.

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