Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the bar chart below illustrates the past danger rate and being victim of crime in actual likelihood from 2009 to 2011.

overall, car crime had the most proportion nevertheless burglary and violent crime had the same percentages in perceived 2009 to 2011 but violent crime has more number then burglary in actual 2009 to 2011.

firstly the perceived of burglary in 2009-10 has more number then perceived 2010-11 and the number was just over 15 and just below 15 in sequence but the actual number of 2010-11 was more the previous year.voilent crime had also the higest rate in preceived 2009-10 but the actual rate was same in both year.

on the other hand , car crime had the most number and perceived 2009-10 had the proportion of just over 20 and 2010-11 had just over 15.also the actual rate of 2009-10 was more then 2010-11 but the number was very few.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to clearly identify the main features or make meaningful comparisons. The description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as stating that 'car crime had the most proportion' without clearly referencing the specific years or the distinction between perceived and actual likelihood. The analysis lacks a clear overview, and the data points mentioned are often vague (e.g., 'just over 15'). To improve, you must clearly distinguish between the categories and provide precise data points while highlighting the most significant trends or differences between perceived and actual crime rates.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive or misused, such as the frequent use of 'and' to connect unrelated ideas. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping by crime type or by comparing perceived versus actual rates.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'number' and 'rate' when more precise terminology is required to describe statistical data. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'past danger rate' and 'the most proportion'. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'significant', 'marginal', and 'fluctuation', and ensure these are used in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect word order, and missing articles. For example, 'violent crime has more number then burglary' should be 'violent crime had a higher rate than burglary'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and the appropriate use of comparative structures (e.g., 'higher than' instead of 'more then').

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