Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This graph shows the information about the dangers, and actually percentages of us being a victim to these dangers from the year 2009 to 2011.
three types or dangers are discussed in this graph, car crime being at the highest both in perceived amount and at actually happening, burglary and violent crime are almost similar in perceived years, but talking about really happening violent crime is the second in the list of dangers, and burglary is the third one,
Talking about car crimes percentage of perceived amount of happening is more than 20% in 2010, and this percentage decreased to 17% till 2010,
however, actual percentage is 4% in both years, which is higher than rest of dangers. Violent crimes are similar to burglary perceived amounts are around 16% till 2010 slightly reduced to 13% till 2011, moorover actual chances for person is about 3 % for violent crime up to 2011, burglary is noticeably very less chances to happen to us only 2.5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the three crime types and comparing perceived versus actual likelihood. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision. For instance, the data points are occasionally misstated or vague, such as saying 'more than 20%' when the graph shows specific figures. The summary lacks a clear overview or 'main trend' statement, which is essential for a high band score in Task 1. While the key features are addressed, the lack of a clear structure and the imprecise reporting of data prevent a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks effective paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text which hinders readability. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'talking about' to introduce new points. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the three crime categories. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs—one for an overview and others for detailed comparisons—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic phrasing such as 'dangers', 'happening', and 'amount'. There are issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'perceived amount of happening' and 'noticeably very less chances'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise terminology related to statistics and trends, such as 'prevalence', 'incidence', 'proportion', or 'statistically significant'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs would also help to convey the data more accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with sentence structure, punctuation, and article usage. Many sentences are run-on or comma-spliced, such as 'three types or dangers are discussed in this graph, car crime being at the highest...'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction limits the score. Focusing on writing shorter, error-free sentences and ensuring correct punctuation would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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