Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table displays the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. In graph, vertical lines show percentages of victim crime while horizontal lines show crime types( car crime, burglary, and violent crime). Burglary is among the smallest crime than others. The perceived danger are describe with dotted box whereas actual likelihood are displayed with line box.
Overall, there is a high percentage of perceived danger in car crime in 2009/10 while in burglary and violent crime the percentage would be same. there is also a highest percentage of Actual likelihood in car crime while in burglary the percentage would be lowest than violent crime in 2010/11. In 2010/11 the percentage of actual likelihood is lowest in all 3 categories there is no such difference in them.
In sum up, there is slightly changes in burglary and violent crime in both perceived and actual danger while car crime is amongst the large crime.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately interpret the data. The description of the graph is confusing, referring to 'vertical lines' and 'horizontal lines' which do not accurately describe the bar chart provided. Furthermore, the analysis of the data is flawed; for example, the claim that 'burglary is among the smallest crime' is not clearly supported by the visual evidence, and the comparisons between perceived and actual likelihood are imprecise. The response lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the data points mentioned are often vague or incorrectly interpreted, leading to a failure to fully highlight the key features of the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the transition 'In sum up', which is non-standard. Referencing is often unclear; for instance, the phrase 'there is no such difference in them' is ambiguous and does not effectively link back to the previous data points. While there is an attempt at an overall structure, the lack of logical flow between sentences makes the information difficult to follow, and the relationship between the perceived and actual data is not clearly managed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'victim crime', 'line box', and 'slightly changes'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical data, relying on basic descriptors like 'smallest' or 'large' rather than more appropriate academic terms like 'lowest incidence' or 'most prevalent'. Some errors, such as 'are describe' and 'amongst the large crime', indicate a lack of control over word forms and collocations, which occasionally hinders the clarity of the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on a limited range of simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The perceived danger are describe', 'actual likelihood are displayed') and incorrect article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and awkward parenthetical usage. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the use of more complex structures and impacts the overall readability of the response.
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