Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the comparision between actual victim along with preconceived jeopardy of crime occured in 2009 as well as 2010.

First and foremost, perceived burglary is marked at nearly 16% against actual crime at mere 2% in 2009-10.

While, with slight decrease of nearly about 13% in recogined danger along with 2% in factual scenes is noticed in next year.

Secondly, car crime lies at top of the graph figuratively 21% of perceived one in 2009-10 which drops to 17% in 2010-11. However, factual victim of crime stands at 4.5% in both the years.

Thirdly, the graph of violent crime is identical to burglary one in perceived section while for actual crime figures are varied. About, 3% for the both the year.

Overall, it is crystal clear from the graph that percentage of perceived jeopardy upholds maximum place than actual likelihood of being a victim of the crime

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, including the comparison between perceived and actual crime. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the trends. While you identified the key data points, the description of the trends is occasionally imprecise, such as the phrasing 'factual scenes' or 'preconceived jeopardy,' which does not accurately reflect the data provided. To reach a higher band, ensure that you group the data more logically and provide a more sophisticated summary of the differences between the two categories across the years.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use transition signals like 'First and foremost,' 'Secondly,' and 'Overall,' which provide a basic framework. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is repetitive. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'the graph of violent crime is identical to burglary one,' where the comparison is awkward. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward word choices and non-standard collocations. For example, 'preconceived jeopardy' and 'factual scenes' are not natural ways to describe crime statistics. You also use 'comparision' (spelling error) and 'recogined' (spelling error). While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of precision in word choice limits your score. To improve, focus on using more accurate terminology for data reporting, such as 'perceived risk' or 'actual incidence,' and ensure you check your spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of information. Examples include 'actual victim along with preconceived jeopardy of crime occured' (incorrect preposition and verb form) and 'percentage of perceived jeopardy upholds maximum place' (unnatural phrasing). There are also issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips.

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