Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph shows the proportion of perceived danger and actual likelihood of being victim in year 2009/2010 and year 2010/2011 in crimes category such as burglary, car crime, violent crime.
Overall, as it can be seen that greater number of percentage of perceived and actual likelihood of being victim is from car crimes. Whereas burglary and violent crimes are neck to neck.
Firstly, highest number of perceived danger was from 2009/10, followed by perceived danger 2010/11 in every category, with greatest perceived victim were from car crimes from year 2009/10 with approximately 20% and year 2010/11 with around 17%. It was also leading in actual victims in year 2009/10 and 2010/11 with approximately 4% and 3.92% respectively.
Secondly, there is burglary and violent crime which are around same percentage in perceived danger with mostly 16% in 2009/10 and around 14% in 2010/11. Whereas there is a little difference in actual victim in both the categories with violent crime has greater crimes than burglary.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the categories and the two time periods. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify that car crime has the highest perceived and actual likelihood, the comparison between burglary and violent crime is vague, using phrases like 'neck to neck' and 'mostly 16%'. The data reporting lacks precision in places, and the distinction between perceived and actual figures could be more clearly contrasted to better highlight the gap between public perception and reality. To improve, ensure you provide more specific data points and a more analytical comparison of the trends across the two years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', and 'Secondly' to signal the progression of your ideas. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the comparison between burglary and violent crime lacks sufficient detail to be fully coherent. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will help elevate your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main information. You use topic-specific terms like 'proportion', 'perceived danger', and 'actual likelihood'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'greater number of percentage' and 'violent crime has greater crimes'. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are contextually accurate and natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'being victim' (should be 'being a victim'), 'in crimes category' (should be 'in crime categories'), and 'with mostly 16%' (which is grammatically incomplete). These errors occur frequently but do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without missing prepositions or auxiliary verbs.
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