Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar graph illustrates a difference between real and perceived similarities of criminals. This summary will explain the percentage of crime. It will also demonstrate that even it is done or not.
In the given graph there are 4 types of lines which are marked by their specialities. The lines having close doted lines are referring to crime perceived from 2009 to 2010.While line having lines coming from top left to bottom right indicates actual crimes from 2009 to 2010. The lines having opposite to these two indicates perceived and actual rate of crime between 2010 and 2011.
The burglary crime from 2009 to 2010 were showed perceived to 15 percent , but the actual crime were less than 5 percent. Similarly from 2010 to 2011 the burglary crime were shown between 10 and 15 percent but the actual crime were little more than privous year. Moreover the graph also shhow car crime whichh were almost
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the graph comparing perceived and actual crime likelihood, but it fails to fully address the task requirements. The introduction misinterprets the visual data, stating it explains 'similarities of criminals' rather than crime types. The description of the graph's layout is confused and inaccurate, describing lines rather than the actual bar chart formats. Furthermore, data is only very partially reported for burglary before the text abruptly trails off due to incomplete sentences (e.g., 'Moreover the graph also shhow car crime whichh were almost'). Consequently, key features are not adequately highlighted or compared across the categories, placing this submission firmly at a Band 4.0 level for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisational structure is weak and breaks down completely by the end of the text. While paragraphs are attempted, the logical progression is hindered by confusing explanations of the visual elements and abrupt, unfinished sentences. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes misused, such as 'While line having lines coming from...'. Referencing is unclear, and the text ends mid-thought with no overall conclusion or complete final sentence. This demonstrates a lack of coherent arrangement and places the response in the Band 4.0 category.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and occasionally inaccurate, reflecting a limited range for an Academic Task 1 response. Examples of inappropriate word choices and expressions include 'real and perceived similarities of criminals' and 'specialities' to refer to chart keys. Spelling and typographical errors are noticeable throughout the text, such as 'doted', 'privous', 'shhow', and 'whichh'. While some basic crime-related vocabulary is attempted, the frequent errors and restricted lexical repertoire align closely with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent errors. Examples of grammatical inaccuracies include 'even it is done or not', 'The burglary crime from 2009 to 2010 were showed perceived to 15 percent', and subject-verb agreement issues ('the actual crime were'). Punctuation is faulty, and the presence of unfinished sentences significantly impedes meaning. These frequent structural errors and the lack of complex sentence control warrant a Band 4.0.
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