Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the graph show the information about crime percentage perceived and likelihood of being a victim of crime : by crime type
firstly we talk about the burglary crime perceived in 2009-10 that was around 15% but actual crime is around 2% that was very low but in 2010-11 its around 13% lower than last year and actual crime rate is few higher than last year
car crime in 2009-19 perceived is around 21% that's higher than burglary and actual crime rate is 4%, in 2010-11 perceived car crime rate is lower than last year its around 12% but actual crime is similar than last year, moreover violent crime perceived in 2009-10 is around 15% but actual crime rate is around 3% but in 2010 the perceived rate is lower than last year but actual crime rate were same in both years
the bar graph show the information about the crime rate in 2009-10 to [redacted phone] and their percentage of actual crime and perceived
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting information about different crime types, including burglary and car crime. However, the response lacks an overview, which is a key requirement for Academic Task 1. Furthermore, the data points mentioned contain numerous inaccuracies and confusion regarding the years and percentages shown in the graph (e.g., referring to '2009-19' or incorrectly attributing figures). The information is presented in a somewhat haphazard way without effectively highlighting the main trends or making meaningful comparisons between perceived danger and actual likelihood. Consequently, the response falls into Band 4 because it only minimally addresses the task requirements with significant omissions and inaccuracies in data reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks clear logical organisation and proper paragraphing. The entire response is structured as a series of run-on sentences with very little punctuation, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal or misused, relying heavily on informal spoken connectors like 'firstly we talk about' rather than formal academic linking words. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion; even the concluding sentence merely reiterates the prompt in a fragmented manner. Therefore, the information and ideas are not arranged coherently, aligning with the Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms such as 'perceived', 'actual crime rate', 'higher than last year', and 'around'. There are very few attempts at less common lexical items appropriate for an academic task. Furthermore, word choice and collocation are frequently awkward or imprecise (e.g., 'the graph show the information about crime percentage perceived'). While basic meaning can be deciphered, the limited range and repetitive nature of the vocabulary constrain the response, fitting the criteria for Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of poorly controlled run-on sentences joined by commas or conjunctions rather than proper subordination or coordination. There is a complete lack of punctuation, including missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and missing full stops at the ends. Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure are frequent and severe (e.g., 'the graph show', 'its around 13%', 'actual crime rate were same'). These persistent errors distort meaning and make the text challenging to read, which corresponds to a Band 4 score.
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