Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart provides information about the possible danger and real lifestyle after being a victim in various crime in 2009/10 and 2010/11.
Overall, crime related to car is comparatively more in actual as well as perceived situation as compare to burglary and violent crime in both time period.
In 2009/10, perceived risk was just over 15% in burglary but actual likelihood was around 2%. For crime related to car, perceived danger was considerably high, reaching over 20% in the same time frame, whereas actual situation was just below 5%. Similarly, perceived danger was 15% for violent crime and actual lifestyle was around 3%.
Similarly, perceived danger for burglary slighty decreased during 2010/11 and reached around 13% ,whereas actual likelihood was somewhat equal around 2%.
Perceived danger for car crime also decreased slightly and reached 17% in that period. However, actual likelihood stood at below 5%. In addition, violent crime had perceived danger of nearly 13% whereas actual situation was around 3%. Even though perceived danger changed for each crime, actual likelihood was almost same.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student covers all parts of the task well, successfully reporting the main features and making comparisons between the perceived danger and actual likelihood of the three crime types across both years. The overview correctly identifies that car crime is the highest in both perceived and actual situations. Key figures are accurately cited, such as the perceived risk for burglary being over 15% in 2009/10 and dropping to 13% in 2010/11. However, there are some minor awkward phrasings like 'real lifestyle after being a victim' which slightly detract from the precision of data reporting, but the response satisfies the requirements for Band 6.5 to 7.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall progression and logical arrangement. It begins with an introduction and a clear overview paragraph, followed by detailed body paragraphs comparing the years and crime types. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2009/10', 'Similarly', and 'However' are used reasonably well to guide the reader through the data, although some transitions feel a bit repetitive ('Similarly'). Paragraphing is appropriately utilised to separate the general overview from the detailed data points, resulting in a coherent piece of writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'considerably high', 'likelihood', and 'perceived danger'. However, there are notable lexical inaccuracies and unnatural collocations, such as 'real lifestyle after being a victim' instead of 'actual likelihood of being a victim' and 'actual lifestyle' instead of 'actual likelihood'. Spelling is generally accurate, but word choice errors occasionally impede natural expression and indicate limitations in precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer employs a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, using subordinate clauses introduced by 'whereas' and 'even though'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing choices, such as 'crime related to car is comparatively more in actual as well as perceived situation as compare to burglary', missing articles ('crime related to car'), and slight pre-position or comparative errors ('slighty decreased', 'somewhat equal around 2%'). Despite these errors, they rarely impede overall communication, placing the response solidly in Band 6.0.
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