Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph below illustrates the information about perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime as well as crime type, in year 2009/10 and 2010/11.
Overall, there was a huge assumption about the events, whereas the actual crimes indicated the fewer percentages. Moreover, Burglary and Violent crime ranked equal in perceived in both periods, only Car crime was the highest among all three. whether in assumption or actual both scored high in the graph.
In year 2009/10, expected crime was touched 15% whereas the actual incidents reported 2%, same in 2010/11 period, there was 13% likelyhood of crime but the actual reports showing 0.5% growth. Furthermore, actual reported incidents showed
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 113 words and trailing off mid-sentence. While the student attempts to provide an overview and mentions the main crime types, the content is severely underdeveloped and incomplete. Key data points are misread or vague, such as stating 'expected crime was touched 15% whereas the actual incidents reported 2%' and confusing the actual figures. Because the text is incomplete and significantly under length, it only minimally responds to the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay begins with an attempted introductory paragraph and an overall statement, but the logical progression breaks down rapidly due to the incomplete ending. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the final section trailing off into an unfinished sentence ('Furthermore, actual reported incidents showed'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes incorrectly, such as 'whereas the actual crimes indicated the fewer percentages' and 'whether in assumption or actual both scored high', which impairs readability and logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent unnatural collocations and word choices. Examples include 'huge assumption about the events', 'fewer percentages', and 'expected crime was touched'. The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'perceived danger', 'actual likelihood', and 'victim of crime', but inaccuracies in word formation and phrasing restrict communication and show a limited lexical range suitable for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and flawed complex structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'in year 2009/10' (missing articles), 'expected crime was touched' (incorrect passive voice), and 'there was 13% likelyhood of crime but the actual reports showing' (tense and agreement issues). Additionally, the response ends abruptly with an incomplete sentence fragment, causing significant difficulty for the reader.
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