Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The pie charts illustrates the percentage of owned houses and also rental houses in the UK in 1991 and 2007. In this summary i describe the following pie chart information and also make comparisons between four types of housing and renting catageries.

In 1991 there was have 22 million homes that rise to the 27 million in 2007. The home owner was 60 percent in 1991 but it is increase to the 70 percent in 2007.

The social renting are 17 percent now however it was 23 percent in 1991. Private ranting remain same 11 percent in both years. Social housing was 6 percent in 1991 but it is fall to the 2 percent only in the year of 2007.

Overall the housing owned and rented in the UK is increase and decrease in several catagories in two different years. The major rise we see only in owned homes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The candidate has completely misunderstood the visual prompt. The stimulus is a bar chart concerning the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime by crime type in 2009/10 and 2010/11. However, the student wrote about pie charts showing housing tenure in the UK in 1991 and 2007. This represents a completely off-topic response. Furthermore, the length requirement of at least 150 words is not met, as the response contains only 149 words. Because the writing addresses a completely different task, Task Achievement cannot exceed Band 3.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organisation is severely compromised by the off-topic content. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, such as 'In 1991', 'The social renting are', and 'Overall'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the paragraphing does not follow a logical progression relevant to the actual task data. However, looking strictly at structural attempts, sentences are separated into paragraphs, which prevents a score of 3.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-choice and spelling errors (e.g. 'catageries', 'ranting', 'catagories'). The student struggles with basic collocations and terminology related to charts and statistics. The limited vocabulary is heavily influenced by the memorisation or hallucination of a completely different writing prompt, meaning appropriate vocabulary for the actual task is entirely absent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple and flawed sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors that impede communication, such as 'there was have 22 million homes', 'The home owner was 60 percent', and 'is increase and decrease'. Verb tense usage is erratic, switching inappropriately between past and present time frames ('rise to the 27 million', 'it is increase'). Control over basic syntax is weak.

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