Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph represents a victim of crime, the perceived dengerous and actual likelihood.
Looking at information in more detail, begin with, percentages of crime by burlary, up to 15% in perceived in 2009 and 2010, when approximetely 2.5%, actual in similar year, after above 10% again with perceived in 2010 and 2011 while slightly rised by actual iin 2010 and 2011 than 2009 and 2010 as 1% more. A marked increase was observed in 2009 and 2010 perceivd by car about apone to 20% and marginally deacrese in 2010 and 2011. Ferther, the crim by violent 15% perceived in 2009 and 2010, after thats down with both catagories. By comparison the most did crime by car perceived in 2009 and 2010.
Overall, the most notable feature was sharp rise in 2009 to 2010, and fall in 2010 to 2011.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, containing only 139 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to under-developed ideas and limited reporting of data. While the student attempts to mention figures for burglary, car crime, and violent crime across the years 2009/10 and 2010/11, the descriptions are heavily confused, inaccurate, and difficult to follow (e.g., 'percentages of crime by burlary, up to 15% in perceived in 2009 and 2010, when approximetely 2.5%, actual in similar year'). The overview is extremely brief ('sharp rise in 2009 to 2010, and fall in 2010 to 2011') and does not accurately capture the main trends shown in the chart. A score of 4.0 is awarded for severe word count deficit and inadequate task coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The overall organisation is very weak, preventing clear progression throughout the text. The response is divided into three short paragraphs, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. The student attempts transitional phrases such as 'Looking at information in more detail, begin with' and 'By comparison', but these are used inaccurately or unnaturally. Referencing and referencing links are unclear, and sentences often lack logical connection, making the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present visually, but the grouping of information lacks cohesion. This corresponds to a band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. There are numerous spelling mistakes and inappropriate word choices throughout the text, such as 'dengerous' instead of danger, 'burlary' for burglary, 'apone' for up to/approximately, 'deacrese', and 'catagories'. The student attempts less common vocabulary ('perceived', 'likelihood', 'proportion'), but misuse and frequent spelling errors severely strain the reader and impede clear communication. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for an academic task, meriting a band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed clauses rather than complete, controlled sentences (e.g., 'percentages of crime by burlary, up to 15% in perceived in 2009 and 2010, when approximetely 2.5%, actual in similar year'). Grammatical accuracy is very low, with frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and word order ('while slightly rised by actual iin 2010', 'the crim by violent 15% perceived'). These errors frequently distort meaning and make the text difficult to parse. A band 4.0 is appropriate here.
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