Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph below shows the percived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime between the year 2009 to 2010 and 2010 to 2011.
It can be seen that all the crimes percieved are far greater in both the years than the actual crime rate. The highest precieved and actaul crime rate from both 2009 to 2010 and 2010 to 2011 were the highest recorded in both preceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of Car Crime.
Accord to the data of both perceived and actual crime type from 2009 to 2010 has been perceived the highest in car crime at 22% and actual being at almost 5%. The perceived crime type for both burglary and violent crime is the same at a little over 15%. However, actually violent crime was higher at 3% while burglary seem as it is at 2.75%.
As of the crime type percieved and actual likelihood of being a vicrim in 2010 to 2011 was the same as 2009 to 2010 being Car Crime. The highest perceived was 17% while in reality it was near to 4.5%. Burglary was perceived at 13% while it was actually at 3%.
Violent crime being the last was also perceived at almost 13% while actually being a little over 3%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting the overarching trend that perceived danger significantly exceeds actual likelihood, and identifying car crime as the highest category in both periods. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in reading the data, such as stating that car crime was perceived at 22% in 2009/10 (when it was closer to 21%) and using phrasing that lacks precision when comparing the categories. While an overview is attempted in the introduction and second paragraph, the lack of complete data accuracy prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Nevertheless, the main comparisons between perceived and actual crime types are addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged into paragraphs, starting with a loose introduction and attempting to group information by year and crime type. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions (e.g., 'As of the crime type percieved...'). Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes mechanically applied. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structuring of ideas lacks seamless flow, making it occasionally difficult to follow the comparisons between the years and crime categories.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with domain-specific terms such as 'crime rate', 'likelihood', 'victim', 'burglary', and 'violent crime'. However, there are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'percieved', 'precieved', 'actaul', 'Accord', and 'vicrim'. The student attempts less common vocabulary but lacks control over word forms and spelling, which restricts the lexical score to this level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'It can be seen that all the crimes percieved are far greater...' and 'However, actually violent crime was higher...'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'Accord to the data' (incorrect preposition and word form) and 'burglary seem as it is at 2.75%'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, missing periods at the end of some sentences. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, though the overall meaning remains accessible.
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