Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given image is a bar which give us a vital information regarding the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall, It is evident that over the period the perceived recorded higher figure, while on the other hand in burglary the actual had smallest share ranked, Another noticeable point is that in violent crime the actual is accounted in same rank.

Looking at the first categorie, the burblary is less then to car crime and in car crime the perceived is almost above 20% while is 15% and the actual is one fifth morever, both are the same ranked and half in burblary and while on other the half is violent crime.

Truning to the next categorie, the car crime perceived is alomost 20% and the actual is both are same, while recorded in one fifth and car crime had the greatest recorded in over the period

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by giving a general overview and mentioning some categories such as burglary, car crime, and violent crime. However, the data interpretation is largely inaccurate, incoherent, and confusing. Phrases like 'actual is accounted in same rank' and 'burblary is less then to car crime' fail to clearly report the main features or make accurate comparisons from the chart. Furthermore, important numerical details from the graph (such as the specific percentages around 2.0% to 21%) are either misread or poorly explained, leading to a poorly developed and difficult-to-follow task response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the text is severely compromised by broken sentence structures and a lack of clear progression. While the student attempts transitional phrases such as 'Overall,' 'Looking at the first categorie,' and 'Truning to the next categorie,' the sentences within and across these sections fail to connect logically. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion breaks down due to confusing referencing and disjointed clauses, making the text very difficult to read as a coherent whole.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and frequently inaccurate. The student relies on imprecise terms and exhibits major spelling and word-form errors, such as 'categorie' instead of 'category', 'burblary' instead of 'burglary', and 'alomost' instead of 'almost'. Phrases like 'smallest share ranked' and 'greatest recorded in over the period' demonstrate a very limited control of lexical items and collocations, which severely strains the reader's comprehension.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 3.5

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text is plagued by fragmented sentences, run-on structures, and missing subjects or verbs (e.g., 'the given image is a bar which give us', 'while is 15% and the actual is one fifth morever'). There is almost a complete absence of error-free sentences, and the frequent grammatical errors constantly distort the intended meaning and impede communication.

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