Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph illustrates the perceived risk of becoming a victim of crime compared with the actual likelihood of experiencing crime.
Overall, it can be seen that there are three categories of crime burglary, car crime, and violent crime. The crime types percentage of perceived were very high in car crime.And the percentage of actual crime recorded in burglary.while the proportion violent and burglary were comparatively same.
To begin with, In crime car the percentage of perceived reached to 22 and
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 80 words. Consequently, the description of the visual data is severely incomplete. While the student provides a brief introduction and attempts an overview by identifying the three crime categories, the body of the report breaks off mid-sentence after addressing only a fraction of the data. Key comparisons between perceived danger and actual likelihood across the two years are missing. Under IELTS guidelines, under-length responses cannot achieve a passing task achievement score, resulting in a band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is disjointed due to its extreme brevity and abrupt cutoff. Although an introductory sentence is present, the second paragraph contains confusing sentence structures, unpunctuated clauses ('burglary, car crime, and violent crime. The crime types percentage...'), and abrupt dangling fragments like 'while the proportion violent and burglary were comparatively same.' Paragraphing is broken as the final incomplete sentence trails off with stray line breaks. Logical progression is severely hindered by these structural and cohesive flaws, placing the response at a band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, such as 'percentage of perceived', 'actual crime', and 'proportion'. There are notable word choice and collocation errors, including 'In crime car' instead of 'In car crime' and awkward phrasing like 'comparatively same' instead of 'comparatively similar'. Due to the limited range of vocabulary and frequent lexical awkwardness, the response aligns with band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting of basic sentence patterns with frequent errors. Examples of grammatical inaccuracies include missing prepositions and articles, poor word order ('the percentage of perceived reached to 22 and'), and incomplete structures. Because the writing cuts off mid-sentence, complex structures are absent or incomplete. The frequency of errors makes the text difficult to parse in places, supporting a band 4.5 score.
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