Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph below illustraits the viewed danger and actual likelihood of existing a victim of crime.

overall, it is clear that the car crime ratio were more than the other crimes,where as in car crime almost 22% of cases viewed in 2009/10 but the actual crime was barely 4% and in 2010/11 around 17% cases perceived but the real cases were almost 4% same as in 2009.

In burglary almost 15% crime were perceived and the 3% was actual crime in 2009/10,However in 2010/11 almost 13% crime viewed but the real one was 3.5%.

In violent crime 15% of crime recorded in 2009/10 but the real were almost 4% Whereas, in 2010/11 13.5% crime recorded and the true crime was only 4%.

in conclusion

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph comparing perceived and actual crime likelihood. However, there are several data inaccuracies; for instance, the student states that 'almost 22% of cases viewed in 2009/10' for car crime, whereas the chart shows approximately 21%, and states 'in burglary almost 15% crime were perceived' when the figure is actually 15.5%. Furthermore, the response is severely under-length at only 124 words, falling short of the 150-word minimum requirement. The conclusion is also incomplete, breaking off abruptly at 'in conclusion'. Due to the incomplete length, inaccurate data transcription, and underdeveloped overview, the task achievement is limited.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is organized into separate paragraphs for each crime type, which provides a basic structure. However, the overarching progression is hindered by the abrupt and unfinished conclusion ('in conclusion'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inaccurately, such as 'where as' and repetitive clause structures ('in burglary almost...', 'in violent crime...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the lack of a proper concluding summary and mechanical referencing affect the overall flow and coherence of the essay.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'crime', 'perceived', and 'actual'. There are noticeable vocabulary and spelling errors, such as 'illustraits' (illustrates), 'viewed danger' (perceived danger), and awkward phrasings like 'existing a victim' (being a victim) and 'cases viewed' or 'cases perceived'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic, the frequent errors and lack of sophisticated phrasing restrict the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition use, such as 'the car crime ratio were more than' (was more than) and 'in burglary almost 15% crime were perceived' (crimes were perceived). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, notably starting sentences with lowercase letters ('overall, it is clear...' and 'in conclusion'). Complex structures frequently contain errors that cause some difficulty for the reader.

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