Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the bar graph illustrates percentage where people believed they could become victim of crime to real incidents percentage in between years 2009 to 2011.

overall, graph indicates people believed being highly likely to be victims of crimes compared to actually occured in burglary, car or violent crime. the overall percentage of perceived danger of becoming victim of crime had decreased in 2010/11 compared to previous year.the actual crime victims were too low compared to perceived throughout the years and crime types.

in year 2009/10, the biggest fear of single most crime was car crime with around 20 percent perceived value followed by violent crime and burglary crime with almost same percent 15 perceived. in the same period of time actual percetage of victims for car, burglary and violent crimes were respectively 4 percent ,2 percent and 3 percent.

in year 2010/11 , car crimes were still perceived highest to become victims of ,but the compared to last year it decreased by 5 percent. meanwhile fear of becoming victims of violent and burglary fear also decreased by almost 2.5 percent compared to last year.

but actual crime across the types reamained almost same percentage in year 2009/10 and 2010/11

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student covers all parts of the task well, providing an overview and selecting the main features such as the peak in car crime and the vast discrepancy between perceived danger and actual likelihood. Key figures are accurately reported overall, such as car crime being perceived around 20-21 percent in 2009/10 and dropping by about 5 percent in 2010/11. The comparison between the two years and across the three crime categories is clearly made. However, there is a minor tendency to over-generalise slightly on minor fluctuations, and punctuation issues like missing capital letters at the start of sentences slightly detract from formal presentation, though the core content meets Band 7 requirements well.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is organised logically into four paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs dedicated to each year. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'overall', 'in year 2009/10', 'meanwhile', and 'in the same period of time'. However, paragraphing and sentence-level mechanics show faults, specifically the lack of capital letters at the beginning of sentences and a few awkward transitional links. Despite these mechanical errors, there is a clear logical progression throughout the text, allowing the reader to follow the data trends easily, which aligns with Band 6.5 to 7.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms such as 'perceived danger', 'actual likelihood', 'discrepancy', and various crime types like 'burglary' and 'violent crime'. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, though some awkward phrasing occurs, such as 'biggest fear of single most crime' and 'actual crime across the types reamained almost same'. Spelling is generally accurate with minor slips like 'reamained'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands, fitting solidly into Band 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and comparative structures. However, grammatical accuracy is limited by frequent basic errors, most notably the complete absence of capitalisation at the start of sentences and proper nouns, as well as missing articles ('the graph illustrates percentage where people believed', 'compared to last year it decreased'). There are also occasional prepositional inaccuracies ('actual crime across the types'). While these errors rarely completely impede communication, their frequency prevents the text from achieving a Band 6.5 or higher.

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