Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrates the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime by crime type, measured in percentage.
Overall, car crime by perceived and actual crime type recorded the highest proportional, where burglary by actual and perceived accounted the lowest.
Looking at the details, 20% of crime in car by perceived, between the year 2009 to 2010 was recorded as the highest crime percentage, wheras about 16% of crime in car by perceived, between the year 2009 to 2010 was the runnerup.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 85 words. Consequently, the description of the visual data is severely restricted and incomplete. While the student attempts an overview and mentions car crime and burglary, key features such as the actual likelihood data and comparisons across the years are underdeveloped or confused. For instance, the reference to '20% of crime in car by perceived, between the year 2009 to 2010' misinterprets the data categories and structure of the chart. Due to the under-length penalty and incomplete coverage of the prompt, this falls into Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into short paragraphs, including an introduction, an overall statement, and a details paragraph. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward structuring, such as 'Overall, car crime by perceived and actual crime type recorded the highest proportional, where burglary by actual and perceived accounted the lowest.' Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes inaccurate ('wheras'). Paragraphing is initiated, but the overall arrangement feels disjointed due to the brevity of the response. This performance aligns with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('crime', 'perceived', 'actual', 'highest'). There are notable word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'crime in car by perceived' instead of 'perceived car crime'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with inaccuracy, and spelling contains a minor error ('wheras' instead of 'whereas'). The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very basic ideas, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, with attempts at complex or relative clauses resulting in severe grammatical breakdown (e.g., 'recorded the highest proportional, where burglary by actual and perceived accounted the lowest'). There are frequent errors in word order, preposition use, and sentence completeness that cause difficulty for the reader and distort the meaning. This level of grammatical accuracy and control corresponds to a Band 4.0.
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