Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph demonstarte the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime .

Overall, the given data is the information between the perceived and actual victim of crime in 2009 to 2011.

As we can see that the bar graph is showing the information that is the car crime is perceived in 2009 to 2010 is reached to above 15 percent and the perceived in 2010 to 2011 is highest rise to 20 percent.The perceived in burglary and violent crime was remain same to 15 percent.

The actual data in 2009 to 2010 is little bit lower then the 2010 to 2011 is under 5 percent, In car crime both are same to under 5 percent but higher then the burglary and the violent crime is also same underneath 5 percent approximately but lower than the car crime and higher than the burglary.

The conclusion is that the perceived is higher is given years and the actual is lower is given years

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The candidate attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting the higher figures for perceived danger compared to actual likelihood across the crime types. However, the data reporting is inaccurate and confused in places. For instance, the student states that car crime perceived in 2009-2010 reached above 15 percent and rose to 20 percent in 2010-2011, whereas the correct figures from the visual data are 21 percent and 17 percent respectively. The overview is overly simplistic, and the overall development of ideas is limited and vague. This performance aligns best with band 4.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall arrangement are weak. The introduction is disjointed, and sentences within the body paragraphs are connected awkwardly, such as starting multiple sentences with 'The perceived in...' or 'The actual data in...'. Cohesive devices are either repetitive or inaccurate. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between years and crime types without constantly referring back to the prompt. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks sufficient structure to achieve a higher band.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'perceived', 'actual', 'crime', and 'percent'. There are also spelling errors, such as 'demonstarte' instead of 'demonstrate'. The candidate attempts some less common vocabulary related to the prompt topic, but these are handled with significant inaccuracy and lack flexibility. Word choice is often unnatural, for example, 'highest rise to 20 percent' and 'was remain same'. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, fitting the band 4.5 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student uses a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple or awkwardly constructed complex clauses that are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include 'As we can see that the bar graph is showing...', 'was remain same', and 'the actual is lower is given years'. Punctuation is inconsistent, and basic subject-verb agreement is frequently violated. Errors occur with high frequency and occasionally cause strain and confusion for the reader, which places the grammar firmly at band 4.0.

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