Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the risk that people perceive and the real chance of becoming a victim of crime.
Overall, Car crime had the highest proportion in both years for perceiving the crime but in Violent crime and Burglary had perceived crime remained same. Although actual crime crime was largest in car crime rather than in both burglary and violent crime.
The figure for car crime in perceiving had the biggest proportion at 22% in 2009/10 while in 2010/11 figure at 18%. But the actual crime had similar to each other at 4% in both 2009/10 and 2010/11 in car crime.
Furthermore, Actual crime in 2009/10 and 2010/11 was similar to one another at 3% while in burglary at 2% in 2009/10 and at 3% in 2010/11. Whereas, the proportion of perceived danger held at 16% in burglary and at !5% in violent crime in 2009/10 while at 13% in perceived danger
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting that car crime had the highest perceived likelihood while actual crime figures remained lower. However, the data reporting is frequently confused, imprecise, and difficult to follow. For instance, the student states that the figure for car crime in perceiving was 'at 22% in 2009/10', whereas the chart shows it closer to 21%, and claims actual crime was 'at 4% in both 2009/10 and 2010/11' (actual was 4.5%). Furthermore, parts of the overview and body sentences are grammatically incomplete or incoherent, making it hard to extract precise trends. While all categories are mentioned, the lack of accurate data handling and weak overview development restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into four short paragraphs, but the logical progression within and between paragraphs is heavily disrupted by awkward phrasing and confusing referencing. Sentences such as 'Overall, Car crime had the highest proportion in both years for perceiving the crime but in Violent crime and Burglary had perceived crime remained same' demonstrate faulty sentence architecture that obscures the flow of information. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting a sentence with 'Furthermore, Actual crime...' where the link is unjustified. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion breaks down frequently, corresponding to a Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'perceiving the crime', 'actual crime', and 'proportion'. There are noticeable word-choice inaccuracies, such as using 'perceiving' as a noun phrase ('in perceiving') and awkward collocations like 'actual crime crime'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but vocabulary control lacks the precision needed to discuss statistical charts effectively. This performance aligns with Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts some complex structures, but these are frequently faulty and impede comprehension. Examples include 'Overall, Car crime had the highest proportion in both years for perceiving the crime but in Violent crime and Burglary had perceived crime remained same' and dangling clauses such as 'while at 13% in perceived danger' which trails off incomplete. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the response, including issues with prepositions, verb forms, and missing subjects. This places the grammar firmly at Band 5.0.
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