Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart compares people's perceived risk of becoming victims of burglary, car crime and violence with the actual likelihood of experiencing these crimes over a four-year period.The figures are given in percentages.
Overall, People's perceived danger of car crime is the highest all through the years. It is followed closely by perceived crime of buglary and violence which maintained the same level. In addition, Actual car crime experienced in the period of years accounted for the same percentage.
In the year 2009/2010, People perceived bulargary to occur at the rate of approximately 5 % while the actual occurence decline significantly at a percentage of about 2%. Car crime is the highest perceived crime rate my the people which accounted for about 22%, the actual occurence was about 4%. In addition, Violence crime rate perception was around 15% . Actual pccurence was abiut 2%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the prompt by comparing perceived and actual crime statistics, but it suffers from several issues. First, the length requirement is not met, as the text contains only 144 words (falling short of the 150-word minimum). Second, there are notable factual inaccuracies in data reporting; for example, the student states that in 2009/2010 'People perceived bulargary to occur at the rate of approximately 5 %', whereas the chart clearly shows burglary perception was around 15.5%. Similarly, car crime actual occurrence is misread in places. Furthermore, the overview is rather vague and misinterprets the timeline (referring to a 'four-year period' when the data only covers two years across two periods). Consequently, Task Achievement is limited.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, though the paragraphing structure is somewhat disjointed with abrupt starts and very short blocks. There are some basic cohesive devices used, such as 'Overall' and 'In addition', but the logical progression is hindered by confusing data references and inaccurate timeframes. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and sentences do not always flow smoothly into one another, creating a somewhat mechanical and disjointed reading experience. Overall paragraph structure and logical sequencing require further development to reach a higher band level.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic communication but lacks precision and range. There are several spelling errors ('buglary', 'bulargary', 'occurence', 'pccurence', 'abiut'), and word choices are frequently repetitive ('perceived', 'crime', 'actual'). While the student attempts some less common topic-specific vocabulary such as 'perceived danger' and 'likelihood', inaccurate spelling and limited flexibility restrict the lexical score. To improve, the student should expand their range of synonyms and carefully check their spelling before finalizing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('People's perceived danger... is... It is followed closely by perceived crime of buglary and violence which maintained') and incorrect prepositional usage ('crime rate my the people'). Punctuation and capitalization errors also appear at the start of sentences and clauses. While basic meaning is usually clear, frequent minor errors prevent the response from achieving a higher score.
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