Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph shows perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. the data compairs between crimes like burglary car crime and voilent crime with exact number of crimes in years from 2009 to 2011. If we compare the exact numbers we find out 15 cases burglary was precevied and to 2 actual case in year 2009/10 and in year 2010/11 number of burglary were 13 preceived cases and 3 actual cases, there is a drop in preceived number of cases and increase in actual number of cases. Comparing car crimes there were 21 preceived cases and 4 actual cases in year 2009/10 and in year 2010/11 the number was 16 preceived cases and 4 actual cases and in violent crime there were 15 preceived cases and 3 actual cases in year 2009/10 and 14 preceived and 3 actual cases in year 2010/11 which have 1 less preceived case. Comparing all the crimes, car crimes are more in preceived and in actual in all the years follwed bt burglary and violent crime.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures for perceived and actual crime rates across the two years. However, the response suffers from major limitations in task completion. The text reads more like a raw list of figures packed into a single, dense paragraph rather than a well-structured summary featuring clear comparisons. For instance, the writer states '15 cases burglary was precevied and to 2 actual case in year 2009/10'. The overview is entirely missing; there is no concluding summary or statement highlighting the overarching trend that perceived danger vastly exceeds actual likelihood for all crime types. Due to the lack of paragraphing, lack of an overview, and mechanical data listing, this performance aligns with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The entire response is written as a single, massive block of text without any paragraph breaks. This severely impedes the logical presentation of information. There is no clear overall progression or introduction of main features. Cohesive devices are weak and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'and in year' or 'Comparing...'. Referencing is also clumsy, such as 'which have 1 less preceived case' at the end of the long sentence about violent crime. Because the response lacks paragraphing and logical structuring, it fits the Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The writer frequently misuses or misspells words, such as 'compairs' instead of 'compares', 'voilent' instead of 'violent', and 'precevied' or 'preceived' instead of 'perceived'. There is virtually no use of less common lexical items, and word choices are limited to what is immediately visible on the chart. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate the basic data points, resulting in a Band 5 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatically, the text demonstrates a very limited range of structures. The response relies on extremely long, run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions (e.g., 'and in year... and in year... and in violent crime...'). There is a complete lack of punctuation separating clauses properly, leading to severe structural errors. Punctuation at the sentence level is absent at the beginning of the text ('the data compairs...'). Frequent grammatical errors and poor control over sentence boundaries cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing this at Band 4.
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