Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph shows the information of perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime however, in the graph there are some importance of Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime in some years

firstly, there are three types of crime for example burglary, car crime, violent crimes, according to bar chat the highest crime rate is car crime and lowest crime is burglary and violent crime, have some years for example Perceived and actual in the between 2009 and 2011 the car crime has done between Perceived 2009/10, and actual 2010/11 ''as well as both crime burglary and violent

secondly, the car crime rate in Perceived of year 2009/10 is the highest around 21 and same in actual of year 2001/10 is some how low around 4 well, in same burglary has 16 and 2 Perceived and actual on the other side of violent crime is 15 and 3 in both Perceived and actual on same year of 2009/10 as well as, on year of Perceived and actual 2010/11 on car crime and burglary, violent crime rates are in car crime 17 and 3 in burglary and 8,3 in violent 8 4

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime for burglary, car crime, and violent crime across the years 2009/10 and 2010/11. However, the performance is severely limited by poor clarity, misinterpretation of data, and a lack of structured reporting. The overview is absent or obscured by fragmented introductory remarks ('the graph shows the information of perceived danger...'). Furthermore, the specific figures cited are often inaccurate or garbled (e.g., claiming 'violent 8 4'), making it difficult to follow the comparisons reliably. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 level of task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is organized into brief paragraphs using basic transitional markers like 'firstly' and 'secondly'. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Sentences are often run-on and lack proper punctuation, resulting in poor logical flow and progression. Referencing and pronoun use are unclear, leaving the reader struggling to connect ideas across clauses and sentences. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks the structure required for a coherent academic summary. These features align closely with Band 4.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct repetition of words from the prompt, such as 'perceived danger', 'actual likelihood', 'victim of crime', and 'car crime'. There are noticeable issues with word choice, phrasing, and spelling ('bar chat', 'some how'). The limited vocabulary and frequent lexical inaccuracies mean that meaning is occasionally strained, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0 for Lexical Resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student relies predominantly on long, convoluted, and error-ridden run-on sentences joined by commas rather than appropriate conjunctions or full stops. There is a very limited range of accurate grammatical structures, with frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and sentence boundaries. Basic punctuation is largely neglected. These frequent grammatical errors distort meaning and make the text difficult to read, which corresponds to Band 4.0.

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