Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the percieved danger and actual likelihood of being victim of the crime by the type of crime. The values are shown in percentage using different types of doodled bars.
Overall, the data from 2009 to 2011 is shown with contrasting between perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. In all the types of crime, percentage of percieved victims are considerably higher compare to the actual victims.
In case of 2009/10, the percentage of victimes of the car crime are 21%, followed by the victims of burglary at 16% and lastly victims of the violet crimes around 15%. The percentage of the actual victims is too incosiderable. The victims of the car crime are highest followed by slightly difference between the victims of violet crime and burglary.
On the other hand in 2010/11, the victims of the the car crime remains the highest perceived victimes whereas similar victuims of burglary and violet crimes. However the actual
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, noting the contrast between perceived and actual likelihood of crime across categories. However, the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence at the end of the second period description, leaving the 2010/11 data and overall comparisons underdeveloped. Furthermore, there are several misreadings or inaccurate reporting of figures, such as stating car crime victims in 2009/10 were '21%' (which is actually the perceived percentage, but the student confuses this or fails to clearly distinguish the categories) and describing violent crime as 'violet crimes'. Because the response is unfinished and lacks a complete overview of all key data points, it falls into the Band 5 category for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, showing a basic attempt at logical paragraphing. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical, as seen in repetitive phrasing ('the percentage of', 'the victims of') and awkward transitions like 'In case of 2009/10' and 'On the other hand in 2010/11'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and because the text breaks off abruptly at the end, overall progression is severely disrupted. These limitations place the cohesion of the response at a Band 5 level.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, using words like 'perceived', 'likelihood', 'burglary', and 'car crime'. However, there are notable spelling errors ('percieved', 'victimes', 'incosiderable', 'victuims') and recurring word-choice inaccuracies, most notably repeatedly misspelling 'violent' as 'violet'. These noticeable errors and limited lexical flexibility mean the vocabulary reaches a Band 5 standard.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms (e.g., 'In all the types of crime, percentage of percieved victims are considerably higher compare to the actual victims'). However, grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in article usage, pluralisation, and prepositional collocations (e.g., 'victim of the crime', 'percentage of percieved victims are', 'higher compare to'). Additionally, the response ends prematurely with an incomplete sentence fragment ('However the actual'). These frequent errors and the unfinished structure align with a Band 5 score.
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