Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The provided bar graph depicts the proportionof people who face recognized threat and possible of being a vitctim of wrongdoing.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that most of the public face crime in 2009 and 2010. While less actual offence in 2009 was the least in the graph.
In 2009, 15% people face perceived burglary and the actual and the people who face actual burglary was 0.25% in 2010/11 the rate of percieved decrease to about 13% and actual rate was around 3%.
Car crime percevied share was over 20% in 2009/10 which was the highest and actual number was less than 5%. In 2010/11 the percevied car crime was about 16% which declined and actual car offence was about same as 2009/10 about 3%.
Voilent crime was a
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, finishing at only 130 words, and it cuts off mid-sentence at the end. Furthermore, the analysis of the data is severely flawed and inaccurate. The student misreads the actual figures significantly (e.g., claiming actual burglary was 0.25%, and misstating other values). While an overview is attempted, it is vague and incorrect. The confusion between perceived danger and actual likelihood prevents a full and accurate summary of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is inadequately paragraphed and lacks a clear overall progression. Although there are some basic cohesive devices used like 'Overall' and 'In 2009', the links between sentences are often mechanical or confusing. The abrupt ending due to the incomplete sentence at the end (‘Voilent crime was a’) further disrupts the flow and structural integrity of the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very limited and contains frequent lexical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'proportionof', 'recognized threat', 'wrongdoing', and 'car crime percevied share'. Words are often misspelled or misused (e.g., 'Voilent'). The student struggles to accurately convey precise data meanings, resulting in language that occasionally strains the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The student attempts some complex sentence structures, but these are frequently marred by basic grammatical errors, incorrect prepositions, and poor subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the people who face actual burglary was 0.25%', 'the rate of percieved decrease'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are weak, and the response ends with an unfinished fragment. Errors are frequent and impede clear communication.
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