Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided bar graph depicts the perceived hazard and likelihood of being a victim of crime in givin time period
Overall , it is crystal clear that masses are very scared of crime , the real crime was very low in number.In every year perceived crime was high and the actual crime is small. In addition car crime had the highest fear in individuals.
To commence with , In the year of 2009 to 2010 burglary crime was almost 15 percent in perceived crime but actual crime was approximately 3 percent .
Whereas, In year 2010 to 2011 perceived crime percetile was 13 percent and actual crime held was same as in year 2009 to 2010. However, car crime had the maximum percetage in perceived with a fifth in year 2009 to 2010, crime actual was held in very small in number .
Moving ahead, In car crime year of 2010 to 2011 perceived crime was almost 17 percent while actual crime was less then 5 percentum . In addition, expected crime of violent crime was roughly 15 percetile . The real crime of violent crime was roughly 3 percent in year 2009/11 . In contrast .In 2010 to 2011 believed crime rate of violent was less than 15 percent and true figures of crime was around 4 percent
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully identifies the main features of the chart, noting the general trend that perceived danger significantly outstrips actual likelihood for all three crime types across both years. Key data points are reported, such as burglary at around 15 percent for perception versus 3 percent for actual crime in 2009/10, and car crime having the highest perceived fear. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting specific figures, such as stating car crime was 'a fifth' when the value was 21 percent, and minor confusions with dates and percentages (e.g. 'actual crime held was same as in year 2009 to 2010' for burglary, whereas it rose slightly from 2 to 2.5 percent). Furthermore, the overview is somewhat simplistic ('the real crime was very low in number'). It addresses all parts of the task but lacks precision.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, logical progression is hindered by frequent awkward transitions like 'To commence with' and 'Moving ahead,' which are sometimes used repetitively or mechanically. Cohesive devices are clumsy, as seen in 'In contrast .In 2010 to 2011'. Paragraphing is present, but internal referencing and structuring lack clear cohesion, causing the reader to pause and work harder to follow the comparison of data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for conveying basic ideas about crime statistics, but it suffers from frequent spelling mistakes ('givin', 'percetile', 'percetage'), word formation issues ('believed crime rate', 'crime actual'), and repetitive phrasing ('perceived crime', 'actual crime'). While the student attempts less common vocabulary like 'hazard' and 'maximum percentage', imprecise word choices and collocational errors ('crime actual was held in very small in number') restrict the lexical score to the band 5 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is consistently weak. There are frequent errors in punctuation, missing prepositions, and awkward clause structures, such as 'In the year of 2009 to 2010 burglary crime was almost 15 percent in perceived crime but actual crime was approximately 3 percent' and 'actual crime was less then 5 percentum'. Run-on sentences and punctuation fragments ('In contrast .In 2010 to 2011') further disrupt readability. Errors occur across most sentences and frequently cause minor difficulty for the reader.
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